I need some one(some what of teahcer) to proof read and give help on my little essay thingy?

  The Scarlet Ibis








  In James Hurst's The Scarlet Ibis, the setting provides a profound meaning to the overall theme of the story. In the story, many negligent decisions are made. Hurst seems to be saying that every decision you make in life affects not only you, but the people around you as well. My theme statement is "a person cannot change someone from who they truly are, and it is just as valuable to be unique as it is to fit in." The style in the story creates a suspense for the reader. The settings I am using that relate to the theme are the cloves of summer, The yard, Old Woman Swamp.








  The opening scene is example of an image used in this story.In the first paragraph, the narrator describes the flowers


around his childhood home as “stained with rotting brown magnolia petals” and “graveyard flowers.” He describes an abandoned bird’s nest as “an empty cradle.” Those phrases mean that the grave yard flowers were flowers given to the dead. The cradle empty cradle personifies how a cradle represents a baby and now that its empty it represents a dead baby. Even the scent of the flowers that surround him is described as “speaking softly the names of our dead.” This complex description refers to the aspects of nature with words that remind the reader of death. Hurst is creating an atmosphere of approaching tragedy to set the reader know what The Scarlet Ibis is about. It brings peoples mind to a picture of degradation, and the phrases add an awful note of solemn, eerie doom.








 


  Old woman Swamp and the happy times the boys spent there are described in vivid, glowing terms. The honeysuckle and water lilies are woven into wreaths and crowns which transform the boys into youthful kings of this glorious, luxurious paradise "beyond the reach of the everyday world." "The slanted rays of the sun burn orange in the pines," and thus the fantastic day of splendor comes to an almost divine conclusion. This eloquent passage produces in the reader's mind a brilliant image of peace, beauty, and happiness. Old Woman Swamp embodies nature's abundance and beauty. For Brother and Doodle, it seems to signify a world of infinite possibilities and the glory of life. Doodle cries with wonder when he first sees it, and the boys gather wild flowers and make garlands and crowns with which to bedeck themselves. The suggestion is that this is a place where they feel royal, beautiful, and wealthy, the flowers are referred to as "jewels". Old Woman Swamp is also where Brother teaches Doodle to walk, which, in spite of its disastrous outcome, represents a widening of Doodle's horizons. Doodle fantasizes about living a blissful existence in Old Woman Swamp.








  The last scene in the tale showed how " the older brother" really felt about his brother. Walking back, he finds Doodle curled up next to a nightshade bush, dead and bleeding because his heart burst, with similarities to the dead Scarlet Ibis they found. He "lay there crying, sheltering his fallen scarlet ibis from the heresy of rain". The rain drips incessantly from the gray clouds onto Doodle, his thin neck gleaming sharply red, and the fallen elder brother sheltering his "fallen scarlet ibis from the heresy of rain." This heartrending passage calls forth an image of desolate grief that the lone brother feels for his lifeless sibling. It shows how the challenge they had to go through was not worth it.








  Image is truly the most important element in the style of this story. The story reveals a truth about the effects of love and pride.


The weather leads to the death of Doodle and the scarlet ibis. it lead to the ibis's death because the bird was trying to fly home and a storm brought it to the family's home, where it died. As for doodle, when his brother the narrator left him despite his cries for help, a tree snapped ,because of the lightning,and crushed doodle's body. Honestly, If you had a brother with a disability like doodle would you have helped him learn how to walk and watched him every second or would you have been selfish and helped him so he wasn't weird like his older brother.


 

I need some one(some what of teahcer) to proof read and give help on my little essay thingy?
The first paragraph "the opening scene" is good, but how come you never talk about the "clove of seasons" again? You mention how you will relate it to the theme, but then never do. I think that the last paragraph is too opinionated, as you should never use the pronoun "you" in an essay, because you are telling the reader how to think.